Example:
HollywoodFunding.com Reading of Script, Teleplay, story report.

 

Title

The Zamzummim Project

 

 

Material type

Screenplay __x_    Teleplay ___    Book ____

 

 

Number of Pages

119

 

 

Author

Ken Klein

 

 

Created by

Ken Klein

 

 

Location of shoot

New York and other location in the US

 

 

Drama Category

Comedy ____ Comedy/Drama _____

 

 

 

Action adventure _x__ Thriller _____ other >

 

 

 Other >>>>>

 

 

 

Analyst / Reader

G. Macaluso

 

 

Date

2/8/05

 

 

Read for

/HollywoodFunding.com / VP development/

 

 

                                                               

By line of story. one or  two sentences.

          John Bradley’s parents were killed when he was twelve.  As an adult, he finds a journal that his father kept.  In it he finds evidence of a discovery.  He uses the written information to continue his father’s work.  In the process, he learns the reason his father was killed.

 

            Check one in each   

Excellent

Good  

Fair  

Poor

PREMISE

 

Good

 

 

CHARACTERIZATION

Excellent

 

 

 

DIALOGUE

Excellent

 

 

 

STORY LINE

 

Good

 

 

RECOMMENDATION

 

Good

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Annalist review
 yes_x_    no ____

Script or story suggestions
Yes __x__  No___  Attached

 

The Zamzummim Project was an interesting story.  I enjoyed the twists you put on it (not knowing who were the good and bad guys).  However, it is a bit too lengthy right now for Hollywood’s standards. (Although the standard a few years ago were 120 or 110 pages, it is now down to 100 or 90 pages and this script came in at 119 pages.)   The romance between John Bradley and Jacki Kincade is wonderful.  Otherwise, I loved the story.  It’ll be great once you clean it up a bit.

                                                         

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